Glossary entry (derived from question below)
Spanish term or phrase:
ahora eran dos trozos de hielo azul incandescente
English translation:
they were now an incandescent ice-blue
Spanish term
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Works in: Spanish to English, French to English, English to Spanish, and 3 more.
ahora eran dos trozos de hielo azul incandescente
Besó sus párpados cerrados como haría una madre con un hijo y luego posó otro beso delicado en su frente. Acarició de nuevo su cara, y por fin, cuando lo vio tranquilo y con una sonrisa de felicidad en su cara, decidió ponerle algo nervioso. Cogió su pezón derecho entre los labios y sorbió con toda su fuerza, después lo lamió , y él gimió retorciendo las sábanas con las manos. Cuando abrió los ojos de nuevo, habían cambiado de color, ahora eran dos trozos de hielo azul incandescente.
I don't feel comfortable with the usual translations of "trozos" in this instance.
Gracias,
Barbara
Jan 12, 2020 04:45: Barbara Cochran, MFA Created KOG entry
Jan 24, 2020 14:43: Barbara Cochran, MFA changed "Edited KOG entry" from "<a href="/profile/123909">Barbara Cochran, MFA's</a> old entry - "ahora eran dos trozos de hielo azul incandescente "" to ""they were now an icy incandescent blue""
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Native in: English (Variant: US) 
Works in: Spanish to English, Portuguese to English
they were now an icy incandescent blue
Another possibility might be 'they were now two icy blue incandescent spheres'. But I think the problem can be solved by not trying to translate "trozos".
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Plus, 'two' is unnecessary.
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Ventnai
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Greg Ahlswede
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Thank you, Greg!
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Marcelo González
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Thank you, Marcelo!
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Native in: Persian (Farsi) , English (Variants: Australian, French, UK, Canadian, New Zealand, US South, British, Indian, US)
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there were now two pieces of blue incandescent ice
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Note added at 1 day 18 hrs (2020-01-07 08:06:30 GMT)
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The word there is a typing mistake it is actually they.
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Native in: English (Variant: US)
Works in: Spanish to English, English to Spanish
they were now two pools of blue incandescent ice
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Note added at 1 hr (2020-01-05 14:20:40 GMT)
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Barbara:
Following your comment, with the refections that one can see in both pools of water and in the eyes of another, it may be a nice option, indeed.
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And perhaps sans 'two,' as Murial suggests. I also like her suggestion of 'icy.'
| Hi, Marcelo. I like the idea of "pools", because the protagonists are always gazing deeply into each other's eyes anyway. Thanks. |
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