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Mujeres vestidas con prendas que tiñe el más vivo color de grana, el violento añ
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Hello fellow translators! This is a quote taken from a book by Guatemalan author Miguel Angel Asturias, but I have no further context as I don't know which of his books it was taken from. I tried searching for the phrase but didn't get any results. I am translating a book on natural dyes. Grana is cochineal, jiquilite is a type of indigo, and certain barks yield a yellow dye. These are used to dye the garments worn by Guatemalan indigenous people. I would much appreciate your take on this. TIA !!
Proposed translations
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Women wearing vibrant fabrics dyed with cochineal and jiquilite
My attempt
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philgoddard
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[see my translation]
Your sentence is way longer than the ten words allowed by the rules, so you might want to post the bit about "frutas de oro" as a separate question. I'm also not sure how I'd translate it! But here's the beginning of the sentence, which can be expressed far more concisely in English. You don't have to say "dressed in clothes", because it's redundant.
Women dressed in vivid shades of cochineal red, indigo blue, and soft tree-bark yellow
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Note added at 1 hr (2021-04-21 17:42:45 GMT)
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Jiquilite is just a local word for indigo. http://dle.rae.es/jiquilite
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Note added at 1 hr (2021-04-21 17:45:06 GMT)
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Also, I don't think you need to say "dyed", because it's apparent from the rest of the sentence and the wider context.
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Denise: you reposted the whole sentence, so you created a duplicate question. I was suggesting you post the last eight words.
I don't think you need to specify "Guatemalan". There are several related species that are used to make blue dye.
Women dressed in vivid shades of cochineal red, indigo blue, and soft tree-bark yellow
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Note added at 1 hr (2021-04-21 17:42:45 GMT)
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Jiquilite is just a local word for indigo. http://dle.rae.es/jiquilite
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Note added at 1 hr (2021-04-21 17:45:06 GMT)
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Also, I don't think you need to say "dyed", because it's apparent from the rest of the sentence and the wider context.
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Note added at 2 hrs (2021-04-21 19:03:07 GMT)
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Denise: you reposted the whole sentence, so you created a duplicate question. I was suggesting you post the last eight words.
I don't think you need to specify "Guatemalan". There are several related species that are used to make blue dye.
Note from asker:
| Oh dear, I was not aware that I can only post 10 words, and it is precisely the last part that is giving me trouble, and it cannot be separated from the rest of the sentence because it would make no sense, in my opinion. BTW jiquilite is specifically Guatemalan indigo, which is a different variety. I think I will re post this and put the complete sentence in the explanation. Thanks !! |
| Yes, thanks, I did repost, since I don't think posting just the last eight words would work for this translation, which in my opinion needs to have a certain sense of poetic expression |
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neilmac
: Waxes lyrical enough for me...
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Yes, you can have too much of a good thing! Thanks.
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women dressed up in clothes/outfits that reflect the brightest/loudest shade of cochineal...
Sorry, but I can't complete the rest of your question, since it's cut off.
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"the brightest/loudest shades of cochineal and jiquilite"
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Note added at 4 hrs (2021-04-21 20:41:14 GMT)
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I would actually prefer "garments" over "clothes".
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Note added at 27 mins (2021-04-21 16:58:34 GMT)
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"the brightest/loudest shades of cochineal and jiquilite"
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Note added at 4 hrs (2021-04-21 20:41:14 GMT)
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I would actually prefer "garments" over "clothes".
Note from asker:
| thanks Barbara, I'd forgotten about the word limit, since I haven't asked a question in years. The complete sentense is Mujeres vestidas con prendas que tiñe el más vivo color de grana, el violento añil del jiquilite o el amarillo tierno de las cortezas que le da carnalidad de fruto de oro. I now have two entries with the same question, geez. Thanks! |
| sorry, sentence |
Discussion
Maladrón | Miguel Ángel Asturias
Mujeres vestidas con prendas que tiñe el más vivo color de grana, el violento añil del juquilite o el amarillo tierno de las cortezas que les da carnalidad de frutas de oro.