Glossary entry (derived from question below)
Spanish term or phrase:
y un inmenso manto de silencio y tristeza.
English translation:
under a cloak of silence and sorrow
Spanish term
United States
24 years of experience in many countries
Native in: Spanish 
Works in: English to Spanish, Spanish to English, English to French, and 6 more.
y un inmenso manto de silencio y tristeza.
This is from the story about The flautist of Hamelin.
Here is the full paragraph:
En la ciudad sólo quedaron sus opulentos habitantes y sus bien repletos graneros y bien provistas despensas, protegidas por sus sólidas murallas y un inmenso manto de silencio y tristeza.
Y esto fue lo que sucedió hace muchos, muchos años, en este desierto y vacío........
Sep 14, 2021 18:38: Michele Fauble changed "Level" from "PRO" to "Non-PRO"
Sep 15, 2021 11:28: Cecilia Gowar Created KOG entry
Non-PRO (3): Toni Castano, philgoddard, Michele Fauble
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Proposed translations
United Kingdom
I read the Alethiometer
Native in: Spanish
Works in: English to Spanish, Spanish to English, French to Spanish, and 1 more.
under a cloak of silence and sorrow
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philgoddard
: I think you should say immense/huge/whatever.
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Thanks Phil!
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Toni Castano
: Don´t forget the "immensity" of the cloak.
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Thanks Toni! I would not add a superlative to cloak. I considered "deep sorrow" but the whole phrase sounded too verbse in English.
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Sergio Kot
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Thanks Sergio!
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Orkoyen (X)
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Thanks Okoyen
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Michele Fauble
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Thanks Michele!
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David Hollywood
: add "immense" and it's a go
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Thanks David!
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neilmac
: Maybe "great cloak" (am not keen on huge/gigantic/immense etc.)... And "great cloak of silence" gets some relevant hits...
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Thanks Neil!
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Canada
Accuracy and A1 presentation
Native in: Hungarian , English (Variant: US)
Works in: English to Portuguese, Portuguese to English, Hungarian to English, and 13 more.
and a gigantic mantle of silence and sorrow
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Kristina Love
: I'd change the word "gigantic," probably to "immense" or "vast," but otherwise I like this translation.
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thank you, Kristina! My first instinct was to use immense but I tried not to bee too literal...
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Enveloped in silence and sorrow
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blanketed by a great cloud of silence and sadness
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United Kingdom
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Native in: English
Works in: Spanish to English, German to English
shrouded in an impenetrable great wall of silence and deep sorrow
All that remained of the city were its opulent inhabitants and their well-stocked granaries and larders, shrouded in an impenetrably great wall of silence and deep sadness.
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or turn 'impenetrable' into an adverb, thus : " an impenetrabLY great wall";
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Kristina Love
: The metaphor of "shrouded in a wall" doesn't work for me...
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Yes, " shrouded BEHIND a wall..." would have been better, I agree;
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Austria
Retd.T&I, Barrister & Austro-Advokat
Native in: English (Variants: British, Scottish)
Works in: Spanish to English, English to Spanish, French to English, and 5 more.
and a vast panoply of silence and sadness
One meaning of panoply is an array, the other a complete suit of armour, sd in s manto.
To forestall and anticipate predictable objections of 'this doesn't work', the example sentence combines both ideas of a noisy and silent panoply.
BTW, it's not the flautist, but the Pied Piper of Hamelin, as we oldies - coincidentally from the era of Yugoslavia under Marshall Tito - will know from the 1960s' hit single, inter alia by the English singer Crispian St. Peters.
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armour, as in manto .....
Further to the BBC spokesperson’s observations, one of the sources of the film’s strength is the way that so far from hearing nothing, the moments of silence assembled here make audible a vast panoply of noises that are often obscured
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Kristina Love
: I'm not sure I like "panoply" because I was only aware of the "array" meaning and don't know if most readers would know the other meaning either. Checks out as correct, though!
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Thanks. Kristina. I also checked out that the answer works metaphorically and, crucially, includes the 'immenso' idea - which the answer chosen doesn't.
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Discussion
Thanks for your help. I appreciate it.
Yugoslavia
It is quite meaningless!